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Contest Poetry Duel Summer 2023, Vote for your Favorite

Which poem do you like best?

  • Poem One: "A Blessing Too Far"

    Votes: 5 55.6%

  • Poem Two: "Lycanthrope Blues"

    Votes: 4 44.4%
  • Total voters
    9
  • Poll closed .
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We only have two poems and you only get one vote, so read these carefully before voting.

They are fairly short so I recommend multiple readings. For me personally, I think it helps to read them quietly to yourself and then read them out loud.

A blessing too far

The sun does broil upon the scorched trees
Glimmering shafts of bright light seethes
Even shade offers little respite from heat
Stones of the temple scorching Skink feet
A lonely cloud drifts above and on by
We hoped for rain but it remained dry
We venerate your blessings, we do so a lot
But Chotec?... Why did you make it so hot?

LYCANTHROPE BLUES

When the chaos moon shines in the dark
Deep inside me, it ignites a spark
I can feel as it stirs, right under my skin
something awakened by that malignant green

I remember the day, when fate rolled a dice
bitten by Moulder’s mutated, twisted mice
the packmaster cried “a new curse you will bear!”
of the truth of these words, I was not yet aware

I feel the fur, growing between my scales
I feel the blood, pumping through my veins
and I wonder if I am a sort of a new breed
but the thought is now gone, as I just need to feed

…
the scent, the stealth, the chase
a cry, a shield, a mace
the blood, the flesh, the taste
so good, again, with haste
…

When I’m again myself, the night has bygone
but from dusk to dawn, what have i done?
my scales and my claws are covered by gore
a child of the Old Ones, I know I’m no more

As always I think “if I could erase the past…”
but I laugh at myself, I know the truth at last
cause I’m addicted to this dream, I’m lucidly insane
as I now only crave, for the moon to rise again
 
Two poems, and one of them is mine.
Well, at least it kinda simplifies my pick. :D
 
Poem One: Short and sweet with some very nice vivid and eloquent description. I really enjoyed the humour at the end (very Scaffold/Mike McGear.) Muchly enjoyable and well written! :D

Poem Two: I think this piece is less a poem and more suited as a (well it is in the title!) Blues piece. The time I mentally added the wailing cry of a harmonica and a warm bass in the background...wow, this piece really came to life! Fantastic work! :D
 
Y'ttar Scaletail said:
Poem One: Short and sweet with some very nice vivid and eloquent description. I really enjoyed the humour at the end (very Scaffold/Mike McGear.) Muchly enjoyable and well written! :D

Poem Two: I think this piece is less a poem and more suited as a (well it is in the title!) Blues piece. The time I mentally added the wailing cry of a harmonica and a warm bass in the background...wow, this piece really came to life! Fantastic work! :D
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A worthy duel! :D
 
This was a tough choice. Both were good in different ways.

"A Blessing Too Far" had a more natural rhythm for me when I read it out loud. It had a nice comedic punch and was efficiently written.

"Lycanthrope Blues" had more evocative imagery and told a very good story.
 
Well, it had to be a duel and (indeed) it's giving us a lot of entertainment. :)
It's very close , with such a minimal difference a single vote can still be decisive.
 
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*Verminous chittering laugh cut off by a cry of 'Horned One it's still too hot!'*

I am impressed how close that was.

Anyone who is a Blues artist...please have a crack at @Killer Angel's I think it'd work so well as a Blues number. :D
 
...but in the end, i had my comeback in the short story contest. :p
 
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