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Contest Summer 2022 Poetry Contest Voting and Reading Thread (Voting through August 19th)

Which Poem or Poem do you like Best (you may vote for up to two)

  • Poem 1: "To the Praise of Chotec"

    Votes: 3 37.5%
  • Poem 2: "Pets"

    Votes: 5 62.5%
  • Poem 3: "In the Port of Skeggi"

    Votes: 3 37.5%
  • Poem 4: "Speechless"

    Votes: 1 12.5%
  • Poem 5: "Lords of Space and Time"

    Votes: 1 12.5%
  • Poem 6: "The New World"

    Votes: 1 12.5%
  • Poem 7: "Cold Blood"

    Votes: 1 12.5%

  • Total voters
    8
  • Poll closed .
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Summer 2022 Poetry Contest has begun. We only have seven poems and you only get two votes, so read these carefully before voting.

They are fairly short so I recommend multiple readings. For me personally, I think it helps to read them quietly to yourself and then read them out loud.

To the Praise of Chotec


Drums beat


The forest swathed in shadows and dark

Begins to light and turn from gloom

The song of the jungle sounds out stark

As night perishes to Chotec’s boon


Drums beat


The song grows louder from bird and beast

Awaken! Awaken to the glory of light!

We watch the glow over the trees in the East.

To the golden dawn, warm, within sight.


Drums beat


An orb of warmth, of light, of fire does rise

Chotec we gaze to from Slann to Skink

Until the darkness of the old day dies

And a new day passes its awaited brink


Drums beat


We feel the fire course through scale!

Hear the drums, hear the drums!

For the Great Plan shall never fail!

PETS

The swarm crawls through the bushes, a creeping doom
they’re tiny, they’re many, they are Lustria’s boon
they hear you, they sense you, you’ve entered their homes
they’ll bite you, they’ll eat you, deep down to your bones.

Did you think it was safe the river by day
a sudden stream of fire has melt you away
you’ve met the salamanders, to water they belong
consider yourself lucky, you didn’t last for long.

They travel in packs, they move like a flood
with claws and with teeth, they’re out for your blood
no way you can hide, your smell is their guide
they are named the cold ones, we ride’em with pride.

A thunderous bulk that can tear down trees
not hunger for blood, but branches and leaves
is a Stegadon peaceful? yes that is true
but be wary of horns, they’ll just pierce you through.

It’s a titan made flesh, a God in lizard form
its bite can shatter rocks, its roar a sudden storm
an overwhelming terror, the last thing you will feel
cause only a Slann bends a Dread Saurian’s will.

You’ve met our pets, your life now is gone
you call Lustria hell, we just call it home.

In the Port of Skeggi (translated from Joaquin le Brel)


In the Port of Skeggi, there’s a sailor who sings,

Of the treasure he brings, from the temple cities,

In the Port of Skeggi, there’s a sailor who sleeps,

As the lizardman creeps, between the twisted trees.

In the Port of Skeggi, there’s a sailor who dies,

Full of darts, full of cries, in a surprised jungle flight.

In the Port of Skeggi, there’s a sailor who’s forlorn,

All haggard and drawn, in the suns blood red light



In the Port of Skeggi, where the sailors all meet,

There’s a captain who eats only fish heads and tails

And he’ll show you the stump of a limb lost too soon,

With stories of scales, and serpents that could swallow the moon

And he yells to his men with his arm held wide

“Hey! Bring me more fish, put it down by my side!”

And he so wishes for the lost Norscan skies

But is stuck in Skeggi till the day that he dies



In the Port of Skeggi, there’s a sailor who drinks

And he drinks and he drinks, and he drinks once again

He’ll drink to the adventurers of the Port of Skeggi

Who sell their sorry lives in jungles deadly

Yes they’ve thrown their souls for Old One gold

And bare their necks till the last head has rolled

Yet, he remarks that it was their own doing:

“Only a fool seeks the dreams that soon turn to ruin!”


In the Port of Skeggi

In the Port of Skeggi

Speechless

If the glistening coasts of Lustria could tell a story.
They spoke of visitors longing for endless possibilities
in a new land without laws, but with treasures galore,
of inhabitants defending their turf with honor and glory
keeping warmbloods from reaching their Temple-Cities,
But still the waves crush upon a speechless shore.

LORDS OF SPACE AND TIME

We are here, and we watch
the chaos and our brothers, a battle too far
there, in the distance
we are denied our fate.

We are no more here, and we are blind
A maelstrom of vertigo, the battle is near
at charge distance
we are gifted our fate.

The New World

Buried within the Jungle deep
rise Temple-cities great and strong:
Barracks, statues and ziggurats towering,
age-old civilizations now long gone.
Trespassing warmbloods scouring,
gold and treasure is what they seek.

Cold Blood

The wave of bodies forges forward, their scales glinting in reflected firelight.
The fire flames hot, but their blood is cold.
The wave crashes over the foe, muscles burn and teeth are bared.
The purpose burns within, but their blood is cold.
He sees his brethren fall, their cries of pain lancing through him like forked lightning.
The loss sears him, but his blood is cold.
Roaring defiance, he tries to reach his brothers, his muscles smouldering from within.
The purpose strong, but his blood is cold.
He falls, the adversaries blows overwhelming him, even as his draws their life.
Their blood is hot, but his is cold.
Will not yet extinguished, he forces his arms to push himself upwards towards the fight but the strength is gone.
His blood is spilt and his spirit cold.
 
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Nice poems all together. My votes are in :)

I noticed there is the option to change your votes

Grrr, Irmahil
 
Some review-things in the quiet:


Poem One: Though I’d maybe call this more of a hymn of sorts. The writer uses very vibrant imagery to paint a truly glorious dawn over Lustria, punctuated by the beating of drums (perhaps a alluding to the hearts of the coldbloods beating faster as the sun warms them?) Very enjoyable.


Poem Two: Ooh an almost riddle-like poem. Very nicely paced and written covering the myriad beasties the Lustrians use/keep as pets (apart from there being no Huagerdon but oh well. :P ) The final couplet isn’t really a true rhyme, but this feels like a mild complaint for an otherwise fantastic piece.


Poem Three: Heh…I get the reference though it took me a few moments. It is certainly a well adapted homage to Brel’s song (or at least Bowie’s translated version.) A few lines could have a better flow, but otherwise colour me impressed!


Poem Four: A very different rhyming structure compared to the previous poems. It’s short but it is sweet. Pacing and rhyming are more than fine. I suppose I may have liked a little more, but all things considered this was a nice ditty.


Poem Five: Forgive me as my poetry form knowledge is very very rusty, but that’s either close to iambic or a haiku, I’m not quite fully sure which. Nonetheless, quite nice and solid with some good sound feel.


Poem Six: Arguably the shortest piece. It is certainly short and sweet with a good economy of words. I did like the contrasting imagery of the vast size of the temple cities compared to the smaller and less majestic sounding warmblood treasure hunters.


Poem Seven: A very interesting mantra that is built in this piece which leads to the sad but inevitable conclusion. A little sad we’re ending the entries on a more tragic piece, but truly a beautiful one at the same time.
 
Poem 1: "To the praise of Chotec" by @Y'ttar Scaletail

Poem 2: "Pets" by @Killer Angel

Poem 3: "In the Port of Skeggi" by @Y'ttar Scaletail

Poem 4: "Speechless" by @Imrahil

Poem 5: "Lords of Space and Time" by @Killer Angel

Poem 6: "The New World" by @Imrahil

Poem 7: "Cold Blood" by @Lizards of Renown

Congratulations to Killer Angel for winning the contest.

Congratulations to Y'ttar Scaletail for getting second place twice in one contest.


Thanks everyone, these were all enjoyable poems. I didn't post any commentary because I didn't have any intelligent means of analyzing them.
 
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I'm a little sad there weren't more votes and commentary for this competition (as difficult as it is to review poetry!) I know my reviews weren't to a proper schooling level, but part of me would like to know a bit of what I did right or wrong.

But anyway, a well deserved victory @Killer Angel , in fact you had one of my votes for the winning piece. :D
And I be touched you appear to like my style.
 
Poem Three: Heh…I get the reference though it took me a few moments. It is certainly a well adapted homage to Brel’s song (or at least Bowie’s translated version.) A few lines could have a better flow, but otherwise colour me impressed!

Thanks for the kind words, but honestly there was no reference at all :oops:
I am wondering which songs you are thinking of

Grrr, Imrahil
 
Thanks for the kind words, but honestly there was no reference at all :oops:
I am wondering which songs you are thinking of

Grrr, Imrahil

You are so talented you created a poem similar to a Bowie's song, without even knowing it! :D
 
Thanks for the kind words, but honestly there was no reference at all :oops:
I am wondering which songs you are thinking of

Grrr, Imrahil
...But poem three was (part)written by myself...

It was a very direct homage to Jacques Brel's song: Dans Le Port d'Amsterdam, though I used the translated version as the basis for my piece which Bowie covered.


But instead of talking about the Port of Amsterdam and the depravities afflicting it and its people, I turned it to the hopelessness of Skeggi. Some lines I kept because they were already too good and instead I shaped the narrative to fit Skeggi instead. Skeggi itself was a right git to rhyme to. :p
 
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